给朋友写了首歌，觉得不太押韵，望高手指点

arwencat

Yesterday's Rain

Yesterday's rain tells the story
of the day that passed away
Yesterday's rain washed away
my tears for yesterday's pain
The melody that lasted for a day
sang constantly in my yesterday's dreams
But when the breeze of this morning
comes to my bed
No sorrow can be here anymore

So when you sit there and wonder
if the sun will rise again
When you feel cold and lonely
in the rain of a night so dark
Just remember what i said
and don't lose your hope
For sadness will disapear
like the raindrops
melt into the earth

norule

本来想进来指点一下 没想到是英文的 哈哈 。。。丢人了。。

arwencat

呵呵，还是感谢啊，有心就好